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Depu Techiikue
18-12-2005, 21:32
Long time no post (of poems), eh?

Well, thought I'd post here the latest poem I've written. There's some graphic material in the end, so reader beware!

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This is a story, a young girl victim of betrayal, external pain
She cried herself to sleep every night, like she was living in rain
She was 17 years old, a potential and intelligent developing teen
No one knew of what she was going through behind the scenes
She cried every night, as reality always crushed her dreams
She feared her parents, when she tried to talk all they did was scream
She woke up in the morning, and went to school to be made fun of
A natural negligence towards people prevented her from having one love
She let no one get close to her, everyone who was hurt her
She barely knew herself; it was like she was already in the dirt
She'd go home from school, just to see her parents drugging
She felt it was her fault she never saw her parents hugging
Her mother, a drunk, once told her that she was a mistake
Her tears didn't stop running, like her eyes had no brakes
Looking for love, she went to father, with loving intentions
But being a drunk, he didn't even bother to pay attention
She began to question her existence, asking why is she cursed
On the verge of a breakdown, her emotions were dispersed
She couldn't escape the harsh realities of her miserable life
She cried all the way to the kitchen, her mom not caring she grabbed a knife
She sprawled herself onto her bed, her pain possessing her brain
She put the knife to her wrists, and her soul couldn't find peace,
Even after being slain....

alexanderpas
03-01-2006, 04:20
wow... *don't know what to say...*

Blade
03-01-2006, 12:39
Pretty disturbing subject matter, but a realistic and important one too. Reading it kind of gives you the idea of a rap or something, the structure and rhythm are kind of charactoristic of this.

Good job.

Starfire
20-01-2006, 18:38
Very nice. You really captured the feeling.

Harsh stuffs.

Love and Silence
21-01-2006, 20:14
I .. Love it. I can really relate to it. O_O It's proberly the most ... Heartful poem i've ever read. o_o

Glenn
25-01-2006, 22:26
I guess i can too, perhaps not that much but, sometimes pain tearing inside feels like it eases when physical pain is inflicted, as if you let some of it out.. only for a moment.

Depu Techiikue
03-02-2006, 19:28
Thanks everyone for the complements and feedback. THis poem was based on the life of this girl I know, who went through all of this, and was going to attempt suicide... Luckily, we were able to save her from it, but to this day she still lives with her parents who continue this crap, although they have cleaned up a little bit. She's 18 though, so soon she'll leave and forget they even exist, except for the painful memories.

My heart goes out to those of you who said you can relate to this. :(

Tsuji
04-02-2006, 12:41
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Phew, one harsh poem, certainly tops in my eyes anyway, good job Kryt...that poem sure has a mood of his own there, yeesh. @~@ (Thats a compliment btw)

PabloAM
24-02-2006, 23:06
Very poetic

zimac_muiea
09-03-2006, 13:56
Your not only a sig maker but your also a poet... what a takented person...:cool: