Kaze

[Tharrick]

In the middle of my iaido practice today, a cool breeze blew and soothed me where the sun had begun to burn. This came to me as I sheathed my sword and stood in the wind, letting it pass over and around me.




Clouds hang high above;
A leaf, falling from the tree,
parts before the blade

[Tidus]

nice, though im not into so short ones :P though ya could make a bigger one with that idea, is good ;)

[Tharrick]

Haiku can't be longer, it's the whole point of them - they're a single moment frozen in a short verse. If you make them longer,they're not haiku.

[squall]

i like it alot it was good, but tidus was right if it wasnt a haiku u could go alot deeper into it.

[Tidus]

Haiku can't be longer, it's the whole point of them - they're a single moment frozen in a short verse. If you make them longer,they're not haiku.


thats why i said, im not in to short ones, i know it can't be longer, but the idea is good, for my own opinion, i would have made it longer, but its yours after all isn't it? ya see, i write a lot but never liked the short ones, 2 from 1400 of my poems are short, and they're not the best ya know, hehehe, so it was just an opinion, as i always said, poetry its yours, not them...

[Angel's Trident]

that's a great one there... i don't usually get into haikus but I can understand there tiny-ness and how sweet (sorry can't think of a better word) they are. But you did it justice by keeping it small