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AkitaToma
10-09-2006, 22:55
Left in the Dark

Only shadows I see,
and the chill of the night.
This is what has become of me.
Convincing me to forsake the light.

Choice, this is the right way,
but I am alone.
The fear to leave the day
lies deep in my bone.

The path has been chosen,
to embrace the dark.
All the blood in my veins is frozen,
for I now bear the mark.

I only have one goal,
and it isn't to live.
My soul has taken its toll.
And there is nothing left to give.

Now my time is to pass.
I am but an empty spirit.
Alone, stuck in my past,
and there is nothing left, but to fear it.

~Grendad
Prelude to a broken magic.

Depu Techiikue
12-09-2006, 22:03
I like the word choices used, it's easy to connect the dots and draw the pictures in my head to visualize what's going on here. Sad piece, :( but it was good. I like how it was dark, but not so dark that it makes you feel like you're in a dark atmosphere at the same time. =P

Awesome poem, post some more!

lanaia74
16-11-2006, 11:14
VERY well done!

Zal
17-11-2006, 10:57
Another nice poem

Ever thought about looking into some publishing works?? anyways nice jonb keep it up.