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Sixthcrusifix
04-08-2005, 08:56
Brand Spanking New, just wrote it on HHN (SO it may have MAY spelling errors.. . be warned)

I was caught yesterday
Filling my baby's bottle with lead.
"She likes the way it tastes"
That's what I said;
But they didn't bileive me, and now I'm dead.

Got my leg stuck in a runway today
I fell on the floor like a half beaten bride
I tried picking myself up with a bold heart
And I cracked a rib or two on my pride
Something inside me died.

I blew out my soul on a rock that was,
As black as the tar in my lungs.
I beat a starving child with a throny whip.
I slit my wrists and made a virgin drink my blood
And then I spun around three times, and looked into the sun.

And I live, that I might die.
I've a paper cut in this basket
And a dirty needle at my side.
I like to hug my babies graves. . .
With atomic bombs.

You can't train'em
You can't eat'em
You can't lov'em
too much.
I never bor a child, I never died before
but I've got my baby in the ground,
with a name so long it makes my own head spin around.
So deep in the ground.

I don't need hands and I don't need teeth
I don't have anybody to embrace or a crumb to eat.
But I've got a bottle of nothing,
And two working feet.

Aug. 3, 2005
Bizzaro
04-08-2005, 09:07
WHy dont you just start a poetry thread instead of making a new one for each Poem.
Dusk
04-08-2005, 09:46
I always loved reading your poems, didnt the poems get posted into "Our Lives" before?
Bizzaro
04-08-2005, 09:49
That seems like a good place to make a Poetry thread.
Sixthcrusifix
04-08-2005, 11:21
WHy dont you just start a poetry thread instead of making a new one for each Poem.
Because I want replies that are poem specific, be honest with me. If I put 5, 10 or 20 poems all in one thread, would youhonestly read even 1 of them? By giving Each poem its own thread I produse less of a chalange for people. Nobody wants to try to sift through a bunch of crap in one little thread. I'd never get comments on anything but the first poem.IF we had a Poetry forum it would be less akward, but I'm not going to set myself up to fail. Although I guess I could post them in the "Our Lives" Forum. it's a crying shame we don't have a poetry forum, bloody shame because even poetry, as dead as it got, had a LLLOOOTTT more traffic than FanFic ever did. And as you can see now, there is not even 1 post in FanFic. :(.
Zidane007nl
11-08-2005, 12:31
There IS a Poetry forum, but it was a subforum located into the Fan Fiction forum, but now it's a individual forum.

And, making one thread per poem was always like this.

» Moved!
Sixthcrusifix
11-08-2005, 18:20
There IS a Poetry forum, but it was a subforum located into the Fan Fiction forum, but now it's a individual forum.

And, making one thread per poem was always like this.

» Moved!

oh thank you. I was hoping these would get moved. I don't think you cna delete threads or I would have just reposted them. I don't get the subforum thingy on Vbulliten, I can never find them.
Sixthcrusifix
07-01-2006, 01:28
HOLY CRAP! Thank god I came back to check! This poem was NOT added to my database of peoms and I ALMOST forgot it totaly! I'm half way through producing my book in Adobe InDesign and this poem is very important to it! I have no idea why I'm telling you people this though....

Thanks for keeping od threads HHN! :D
alexanderpas
07-01-2006, 03:46
hey,
it's you,
it's a poem
a poem from you
this's
vulgaR
25-03-2006, 16:45
Great work man.I'm really not right now in the mood to write alot about anything but I will say that I really liked it...damn I should posting now because the last three threads that I posted in,my replies all sounded like I was throwing up with my fingers.
Sixthcrusifix
30-03-2006, 00:33
Great work man.I'm really not right now in the mood to write alot about anything but I will say that I really liked it...damn I should posting now because the last three threads that I posted in,my replies all sounded like I was throwing up with my fingers.

loll thanks a lot :D

I'm gonna start posting more on here too, I've written a ton of poems since. I'm actually compiling them into a book using Adobe® InDesign®.

I've written about 77 poems in total since 2003. Only a few of them are under 6 stanzas, and in general I have a 4 line rule for each stanza. So the book actually is quite full of content.
vulgaR
31-03-2006, 01:52
(now I know what it is)

I can picture a single mother of 16 in an apartment building just looking at her baby,thinking whether it was gold or something really hot.And that paints a picture!