Determined

[Depu Techiikue]

This is a different style you're used to seeing me write in. I am speaking to someone in this poem... will you be able to find out who!? The person I'm talking to might be able to tell it's them when reading it, but might not be able to... I've edited the truth with metaphors, but the truth is still in the poem. This is a dedication.

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"Determined"

Determined, to become something,
Because, I, am nothing

Determined, to become noticed,
I'm living, unfocused

Determined, to feel enraptured,
So used to being captured

Determined, to avoid being hellbound,
Oh how far, I've fell down

Determined, to be forgotten by you,
One of us, is being lied to

Determined, to be carried into your heaven,
Escape the adolescence

Determination, built strongly into my mind,
The only thing you'll find

[-lamb-]

alright this is a nice poem....do i know who this is about?

9/10

[Depu Techiikue]

Thanks for the comments =D

Yup... you know it is. :p

[Mirae]

Nice poem, Kryt, I think I got most of those things you said even with the metaphors~
A lot of talented people here. Very nice, simple & to the point =]

[Tsuji]

No one can rate this poem bad, unless they don't know what it's about.
Infact, I'm not even gonna rate it its that good. :P XP lol

[Depu Techiikue]

XD!

Damn, Tsushi already knows! rawr

*gives Tsushi a cookie*

Thank joo =D

Edit: When I clicked the thread name it automatically took me to Tsushi's post, I didn't see Kimdo's. T_T

Ty Kimdo! ya rly, simple, not as abstract as my normal work. Thank joo for the comments =D *hugs*