Game Over

[-lamb-]

Depression takes ahold like deaths cold grip.
I take these pills to try to escape, and then i tie the slip
Trusting others, my heart ripped out through my back.
Believed in myself, and I feel like i was kicked in the sack.

I can feel the chair tremble as i climb on top
Only a few more moments, and this burning will stop.
I put the final knot in, as i place it on like a tie.
I can't stop shaking as i give out a cry

Its almost over now, i place my feet on the edge.
Just a few more seconds, and i will be placed in my bed.
Now the tears are rolling, and my fist clench into balls.
As i take my final step, I can feel the ro.....................................

EDIT:NO, I AM NOT KILLING MYSELF PEOPLE....DEPRESSING POETRY IS WHAT I WRITE.

[lanaia74]

You let the readers mind wander! I loved this! Totally AWESOME!

[Depu Techiikue]

xD Yeah, as lan said, there is definitely a window open for the reader create their own images from the metaphors. Nice poem, it was well written.

*shivers @ hit in the sack part*

:P

[-lamb-]

Thanks you two....I really love poetry...its my hobbie.

I guess you could say that I was really down in the umps when i wrote that one.....I get like that sometimes....its just happened more often here recently for some reason.

so give me time....more like this will be on later.

[Kaizero]

=D REALLY great poem! I got goosebumps from the end. ^^

[-lamb-]

thanks, i love the ending to it, seems like its really over huh?

[*Death_Line*]

omg..that was so sad..but so cool! lmfao! the ending really was the best part! it makes you think :P

love to see more from you :D