KrytikaL(own rap)

[Akabane-X]

"KrytikaL"
- KrytikaL

[Verse 1]

Yeah...yeah....
I'm ****in' sarcastic, and you're ****in' pathetic
I'm ****in' fantastic, and you're a ****in' addict
I'm crying out, screaming and yelling
God, you are forgiving and loving
So please forgive me
For living in profanity
Promise me, you'll forgive me
I'm ****in' sincere, just believe in me
All you mutha****as can't beat me
I'm tha mutha****in' KrytikaL and you can't see me
Kneel before me, before you can flee
Just do what I tell you, and I'll set you free

[Hook]

KrytikaL, tha mutha****in' criminal
Am I just lyrical? Am I also despotical?
Situation is conditional
KrytikaL, tha mutha****in' criminal
Am I original? Am I immoral?
Condition is critical

[Verse 2]

'Twas my birthday, pray to God next Sunday
Ask God, our Father, the ****in' way
Next Sunday, say what ya wanna say
Then, you'll see God waiting at the bay
When I saw Him, I started to pray
I finally said what I wanted to say
O God, please forgive us for having you disobeyed
All your words are just being thrown away
Father, please show us the ****in' way
I'm now feelin' the pain, turning insane
Now go get all these ****in' cocaine
And put 'em all in the mutha****in' train!

[Hook]

[Verse 3]

Damn! I want to see Mother Mary
And pray the Holy Rosary
I want to see Jesus
And ask Him if he could save us
Help me teach the world and ****in' spread the word
I don't want money, and I don't want ladies
I don't need money, and I don't need ladies
Wait for verse four, and you'll hear what ya wanna hear

[Hook]

[Verse 4]

Jay-Z, Gay-Z and G-Unit, Gay-Unit
You need more units and all those shit
Ja Rule, Ja Fool, y'know tha ****in' rules?
50 Cent, Chingy, 'the **** are those names?
Candy Shop, Candy Crap. Do you call that rap?
Rappin' wit' ladies, party wit' ladies
Waste of money, just hear Makaveli
If you need more help, just call or consult IT
Study his style or even their style
This is the thing that you need to guarantee
Go get all those money
And give 'em all to me!

[Outro]

Tis about me, mutha****as
Tis also ain't about me, tis also about others
Just come wit' me and roll wit' me
Punk ass mutha****as!
Yeah....yeah.....
KrytikaL, keepin' it live!
Missin' Makaveli, the Don Killuminati
Se va el vete a la mierda y yo
Hahahaha
Enemigos que reflejan en el espejo
Killin' you slow
Hahahaha

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Used DM's username as my name 'cause I like it.
Feedback?

[Trigani-Maru-Suke]

pretty good, at first I thought it was DM that posted it,so when I saw your avatar and username I got confused XD and Jay-Z isn't too bad, I used to like G-unit and 50 cent, got out of that though lol

[Akabane-X]

Well, I hate Jay-Z, G-Unit and 50 cent and all the rappers
out there these days. Doesn't make any sense(they're songs).
I just like DM's username so I used it. Anyway, thanks for
the feedback. The verses are short :P.

[Big Boss]

Good thing you got there. Verses are short though, but the hooks make the lyrics longer. You wanna be a rapper?

By the way, you might want to clear that whole thing about "Krytikal" being your rap name.

"Missin' Makaveli, the Don Killuminati" was my favorite part XP.

Shouldn't this be in the Poetry Section though?

[vulgaR]

So I confess I read Lupe Fiasco, but thats just me.And after reading you all I have to is 'DAMN'.The first hook was what made me want to read it all and hell did I like it.I know it's an old thread but the contents are just too great.

(if you seein this jmz)

[Akabane-X]

Thanks, man. I appreciate that.